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aggienautUPDATED: 16:55pm, 04/14/03
The version of my most recent story which was turned in is now online. This is the form it was in when this was updated at 12:28 today.
Any suggustions regarding the story or a possible title I would be very much appreciated still.
I noticed that the online story gives priority to margin width for some reason, meaning that it looks like a normal page in a full width window, but anything less it looks increasingly narrow.. so be aware of that.
PROMPT:
Write a short-short or the beginning of a short story in which a character or characters are introduced in a specific setting. Describe the place, the objects in that place, the atmosphere of the place. (A challenge might be to write an entire story that takes place in only one room.) Remember to think about the relationship between the character/s and objects/setting, and to consider how your p.o.v. character would describe this setting in particular. (1-3 typed pages.)
BACKGROUND:
I think four of four stories people have read in class have been about neglected 14-yr-old girls and I just had to do something about it. In particular, two involved the girl not having a monther, one involved both cheese sandwiches (I considered putting a line in my story of "and what the hell is a cheese sandwhich??" but then decided it would be too direct) and being on a date with a boy who blatantly ignored her (AND not having a mother, that story was like, the epitome of this lame crap genre), and one in which the girl talked to animals.
Also there was this girl at HS, a freshman when my friends and I were seniors, named Jonna, and she was the epitome of the irrational little blonde girl living in a fantasy world. She loved ponies and crap like that and had this utterly idealized idea of how she was going to meet prince charming on a beach in spain or something.. she had the most massive crush on my friend Alberto and in her mind made him out to be completely different than he actually was before she even met him. Yea.. so thats that.
The version of my most recent story which was turned in is now online. This is the form it was in when this was updated at 12:28 today.
Any suggustions regarding the story or a possible title I would be very much appreciated still.
I noticed that the online story gives priority to margin width for some reason, meaning that it looks like a normal page in a full width window, but anything less it looks increasingly narrow.. so be aware of that.
PROMPT:
Write a short-short or the beginning of a short story in which a character or characters are introduced in a specific setting. Describe the place, the objects in that place, the atmosphere of the place. (A challenge might be to write an entire story that takes place in only one room.) Remember to think about the relationship between the character/s and objects/setting, and to consider how your p.o.v. character would describe this setting in particular. (1-3 typed pages.)
BACKGROUND:
I think four of four stories people have read in class have been about neglected 14-yr-old girls and I just had to do something about it. In particular, two involved the girl not having a monther, one involved both cheese sandwiches (I considered putting a line in my story of "and what the hell is a cheese sandwhich??" but then decided it would be too direct) and being on a date with a boy who blatantly ignored her (AND not having a mother, that story was like, the epitome of this lame crap genre), and one in which the girl talked to animals.
Also there was this girl at HS, a freshman when my friends and I were seniors, named Jonna, and she was the epitome of the irrational little blonde girl living in a fantasy world. She loved ponies and crap like that and had this utterly idealized idea of how she was going to meet prince charming on a beach in spain or something.. she had the most massive crush on my friend Alberto and in her mind made him out to be completely different than he actually was before she even met him. Yea.. so thats that.
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Date: 2003-04-14 03:04 pm (UTC)2) why in god's name is a boy wearing a tie on a cruise in the first place? is he s'posed to be punk?
3) she talks of bland names. she could be worse. she could use the word "like" 5 times per sentence.
4)dave's line of thinking is kind of boring also. but at least he doesn't share it, i suppose....
the island seems wonderful beyond measure for the 1st couple of sentences. if that was intentional, it was glorious. oh, and what was your essay prompt?
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Date: 2003-04-14 05:28 pm (UTC)1) Joanna was blonde in my mind.. I prolly shoulda mentioned that. Hmm.. yes insipid would be a good word to use.
2) He's wearing his tie because he's a tight ass. Serious.
3) I actually deleted most of that reference to names. It was supposed to imply that her animals had bland names, and she was oblivious to this.. I tried to clarify it and then just decided it was unnecessary information altogether.
4) Yea um... he's a rightious ass. He doesn't question things Diane. (=
5) As to the island seeming wonderful.. eh.. psha on that. In all my stories sunlight, particularly "a blue sky without clouds" is associated entirely with unpleasantness in every instance. The scenes meant to be comfortable are all dark and involve the colour red frequently. (=
6) Oh wait there wasn't a six. I'm freakin tired right now. The End.